With conflict and breast
a-rising
at the same lack of time
with resistance and nerves
a-wrecking
the same sack
oh rest
let my body soak back into the same
round disquiet
meantime
forced
still
am
I
.
I took a breath so deep it took me with it
away into the dream of breaths all over the court
and the swift moving of one’s heart to passions’ sounds
and the skips moving one’s heart to passions…
still.
With softness and beats
caressing
the same lack of skin
I grow
changed
still.
***
Both the haiku on the picture and the poem that follows were inspired by a change in my health… that has fortunately got way better since I made the decision to be open. Thank you to dVerse Poets Pub’s prompt for today, ‘Choice’, that was really inspiring to me. The depicted haiku will also be given out to a person (that remains unknown… still) as I’m taking part in AndHeDrew’s 20-day ArtGift challenge.
I love your poetry, and the unique style it’s presented in! Hope the challenge is going well. 🙂
AndHeDrew
Thank you! Yeah, it’s going pretty well, actually… I love it!
Well done – well done in English – unchange a very interesting word as it like going back to an earlier pre-changed (and possibly more innocent or naive state) and yet different too. Wonderful. k.
Thank you so much! That’s exactly what I wanted to convey. And it sounds pretty much like « unchain »…
That’s true. I had not thought of that, but very true. It may be worthwhile actually putting « unchain » in as well to bring that out. k.
Yes, I guess you’re right, I could add it to the poem. Thank you for the suggestion!
yikes…i am glad that you were able to make changes and correct this…health issues can be so scary…esp with the heart…there is a nice intensity to this, the breathe was nice…i think i took one there myself as well…
Thank you for your nice comments. I’m glad you took a breath too! And did you notice? I first misread the theme as ‘Change’ and then changed it (haha) to ‘Choice’…
Wow – love it!!!!! your words will live with me for a long time
Wow, thank you so much! I’m glad you appreciated!
So beautiful. I especially like this line- I took a breath so deep it took me with it – and I’m glad your health is on the up and up.
Thank you so much!
love love « still » lines and the visual reduction to « I » is so effective. Beautiful sound here and always wonderful to end with hope– of change and another layer of meaning for « still. »
Thank you! I’m glad to hear form-related comments… because that’s what I most work on. Yes, ending on hope has become important to me lately, because negative poems don’t represent what I have been living. I try to render honest feelings.
I am sorry to hear that you were in ill health but glad it has passed. Your poem elicits that anxiety that comes with mortality, but it also provides a sense of calm and serenity after the acceptance of mortality and its work in our souls.
Thank you very much, that’s so appreciated.
glad your health is better.. and changes and choices often go hand in hand..esp. liked.
With softness and beats
caressing
the same lack of skin
I grow
changed
still
Thank you! That’s true, changes and choices… which comes first? haha.