$OUND$ like different bloods mixed
rattle on my heart_ little pump of. LOSSES
_deployed_
a burn on the aorta
descending instead
I could swallow the whole piece but I
couldn’t risk opening. my. MOUTH
TURNED OUT like arrhythmia fixed
the hum of my heart_ beats forever. LOST
_diverted_
to fever in my nerves
restless inside
I could cry out the whole music but it
wouldn’t leave me. whole. ANYMORE
I used to feel rhythm down my cords
I WA$. wired
I used to be a heart
I used to be HEARD
$OUND$ like different bloods remixed
bumps on my heart_ little spin.it.ROUND
_underscored_
a burial of memories
understanding itself
I could feel my life over and over but I
chose to leave. its. TUNE$
mute.
# tHI$ POEM AND TYPOGRAPHY WERE INSPIRED BY bebetune$ (album: inhale C-4 $$$$$) # tHE THEME WAS GIVEN BY dverse poets’ pub HOST FOR THIS WEEK, sTUART mCpHERSON: our MUSIC. pLEASE READ OTHER POETS_ LISTEN TO MUSIC_ DANCE TO YOUR OWN HEARTBEAT. #
Hiroshimem 
Aimee- loved the discordant form and sounds this created as I read it. It felt very anxious, like music of a skipping heart…I felt this before- arrhythmia – palpitations- feels like the blood is squirting through your veins- you can feel it in your throat. Love how you use music to describe these feelings, and for how life leaves it marks sometimes….nice work mon ami! (sorry for bad French)
Merci mon ami! (héhé)
What a great theme… I could write 10 more poems!
THought the style and presentation fun and refreshing…the play with fonts, for me, lends different meaning depending on placement. I got the music…and I’m dancing…Stu rocked this prompt, and you have too! Thanks for sharing!
Thank you! That’s not only for you, but for me as well; that’s exactly what I tried to do with fonts 😉
haha aimee nicely done….and love the $$ of meaning embedded as well a different layer maybe of hte bloods mixing….your structure too accentuates some of that sound as well…arrhythmia is one of those words that sound great when you say it you know…captures the feel…really great closure on this as well…
Thank you! Although the songs I was listening to have $ symbols in their titles, I don’t think those fit the music, and they were a little surprising to me. So I tried to do the same, write something that has nothing to do with money but still makes you think of it.
So many great things going on in this piece, like the sharp edges of the style, nicely done x
Thank you! That’s appreciated!
Very cool. Love the type and the verse, Nicely done. Thanks
Thank you so much!
this is very cool..love the playing with the $, underlines and upper case..next to the personal emotions, could be interpreted as as loss of the soul of music through commercializing it as well…either way..it has great intensity and enjoyed the read much
Oh, interesting! I hadn’t seen it like that, but it makes much sense. The commercialization… of the heart, the body as well?
This has a fractured tone and feel that bring a feeling of both connection and disconnection. The typography, esoecially the $ signs leads me to think of a strange concrete poetry, that perhaps has irony to its use. Is the heart in the poem riven by love or brought together in harmony?
Thank you, that’s exactly the kind of comments I wanted to have 😉
I… LOVE this!!! AHH!!!!
Thank you!! And I love your name, dear « sui est mon nom » 😉